RV: "If"

I wrote:
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> IF
>=20
> If you can keep your head when all about you
> Are losing theirs and blaming it on you;
> If you can trust yourself when all men doubt you,
> But make allowance for their doubting too;
> If you can wait and not be tired by waiting,
> Or being lied about, don't deal in lies,
> Or being hated don't give way to hating,
> And yet don't look too good, nor talk too wise.
>=20
> If you can dream -- and not make dreams your master;
> If you can think -- and not make thoughts your aim;
> If you can meet with Triumph and Disaster
> And treat those two impostors just the same;
> If you can bear to hear the truth you've spoken
> Twisted by knaves to make a trap for fools,
> Or watch the things you gave your life to, broken,
> And stoop and build'em up with worn-out tools.
>=20
> If you can make one heap of all your winnings
> And risk it on one turn of pitch-and-toss,
> And lose, and start again at your beginnings,
> And never breathe a word about your loss;
> If you can force your heart, and nerve, and sinew
> To serve your turn long after they are gone,
> And so hold on when there is nothing in you
> Except the will which says to them "Hold on!"
>=20
> If you can talk with crowds and keep your virtue,
> Or walk with kings -- nor lose the common touch,
> If neither foes nor loving friends can hurt you,
> If all men count with you, but none too much;
> If you can fill the unforgiving minute
> With sixty seconds' worth of distance run,
> Yours is the Earth and everything that's in it,
> And --which is more-- you'll be a man, my son!
>=20
>               Rudyard Kipling (1865-1936)
>=20
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Well, I did a fairly faithful version:


Be malladher gian nethn qamp navik
lut=F3sosek b=FCrthon, fr=FAmneltel sierrs=E8n giadn;
Be mattenf=E9ndaver qamp kalek on renth ponger,
na b=FCn affendar mat=E1kthoner tadh taus;
Be marrrreler kith rreld=E8n farlaih=F3loter,
su t=E9sbimbal matfartesban giad,
su gr=FAtvimbal madningenter gr=F9tn,
rein farlenvanv=E0n, hotil rin qrevas vaidn=E8n tadh.
Be madbeser kith en enqgron frarenars=E8n gian b=E8sst;
Be matkaler kith en t=ECs frarenars=E8n gian kalanth;
Be rin Isronas rin Nuldas mat=E4^r
mi muinsil matsn=E0dher fanth avg=EDmpelhandh;
Be t=F3lenv=E0n matpearer funin gimans siburer b=FCnd=20
l=FCthtien =FAnfithes fqenqaln en tarronth miathtan,
su matreier kruvdel kof i gian gadain qged=FCer b=FCntth,
mi matk=FC'rseder rin s=F9ft gospakth qualb=FC'ndhuvian.
Be madg=FCfer on ti=E1rparthes i skelkan
taus i b=FCrr maqqgeder fr=E1numaun,
mallutoser mi lif freth maqqualnerraner,
kith fremp enmant=E8n en lutosar i b=F9n;
Be matfudher gian =FCth=E1n, gian kalqann, gian =E0qgn,
anth m=EDltaliun qamp balu nef sis=E9q,
farb=FAn matpearer qamp =FCs giad ar freth
kram dhobar na b=FCrth bur b=FCd "Pe=E1r a!"
Be matsniter piosn kith rin dandas pears=E8n,
su rin danturth trestel fargents=E8n piosrunan,
Be farmatregelek untuth, muinsil fret k=E4shadh,
Be nanaier on renthn, hotil nanaier freth renn tadh;
Be matimaldien fraradruldel notans
on gent=FCn notas farf=FCl=FCl matteger
giadai dhrith mi dhrith=FCr tanq=E9th,
a san teus, taus q=E8r ren!


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Interlinear translation



Be malladher   gian nethn    qamp navik
if can.have.2s your head.ACC when around

        If you can have/seize/keep your head when around

lut=F3sosek   b=FCrthon, fr=FAmneltel  sierrs=E8n giadn;
lose.DUP.3p they.all responsible pointing you.ACC

        all of them are losing (it),
        (and) pointing you (as) responsible

Be mattenf=E9ndaver   qamp kalek    on  renth ponger,
if can.RFX.trust.2s when think.3p all men   scarce.2s

        If you can trust yourself when all men around
        think you're scarce [ =3D don't think much of you ]

na b=FCn   affendar      mat=E1kthoner     tadh    taus;
to their lack_of_trust can.gracious.2s however also

        (and) yet also be magnanimous towards their lack of trust

Be marrrreler  kith    rreld=E8n farlaih=F3loter,
if can.wait.2s and_yet waiting NEG.tired.MV.2s=20

        If you can wait and yet not get tired (of) waiting

su t=E9sbimbal matfartesban giad,
or lie.PV.AP can.NEG.lie  you

        or being lied to, you can not lie [ =3D you're able to [not lie] ]

su gr=FAtvimbal madningenter    gr=F9tn,
or hate.PV.AP can.let_pass.2s hate.ACC

        or being hated, you can let hate pass by

rein farlenvanv=E0n hotil    rin  qrevas farvaidn=E8n   tadh.
well NEG.seeming  too_much with wisdom NEG.speaking however

        yet not looking well or speaking too much wisely

Be madbeser     kith    en enqgron frarenars=E8n gian b=E8sst;
if can.dream.2s and_yet as ruler   NEG.putting your dreams

        If you can dream and yet don't place your dreams
        (in the place of a) master

Be matkaler     kith    en t=ECs     frarenars=E8n gian kalanth;
if can.think.2s and_yet as mission NEG.putting your thoughts

        If you can think and yet don't take your thoughts
        as a goal

Be rin  Isronas rin  Nuldas mat=E4^r
if with victory with defeat can.be.2s

        If you can be with Victory and Defeat

mi  muinsil matsn=E0dher   fanth avg=EDmpelhandh;
and equally can.treat.2s these untrue_ones.GRP.ACC

        and treat both these fakes the same way

Be t=F3lenv=E0n matpearer   funin       gimans    siburer    b=FCnd
if hearing  can.stay.2s in_front_of truth.ACC PRF.say.2s it.REL

        If you can stay in front of the truth you've said,=20
        hearing (it)

l=FCthtien =FAnfithes  fqenqaln en tarronth    miathtan,
make.OBJ fools.GEN trap.ACC by evil_makers twisted

        twisted by evil ones to make a fools' trap

su matreier       kruvdel kof    i   gian gadain qged=FCer    b=FCntth,
or can.look_at.2s broken  things PRT your life   give.2sPST they.REL

        or you can look at broken things that you
        gave your life to

mi  matk=FC'rseder rin  s=F9ft  gospakth qualb=FC'ndhuvian.
and can.kneel.2s with rusty tools    re.build.OBJ

        and kneel to rebuild (them) with rusty tools

Be madg=FCfer  on  ti=E1rparthes    i   skelkan
if can.do.2s all won_things.GEN PRT pile

        If you can make a pile of all (your) winnings

taus i   b=FCrr maqqgeder   fr=E1numaun,
and  PRT it   can.give.2s gambling.ACC

        and give it to the random fortune

mallutoser  mi  lif  freth   maqqualnerraner,
can.lose.2s and from nothing can.re.start.2s

        (and) you can lose (it) and you can restart from nothing

kith    fremp enmant=E8n   en lutosar i   b=F9n;
and_yet never taking_out of loss    PRT word.ACC

        and yet never letting out a word about the loss

Be matfudher    gian =FCth=E1n,    gian kalqann, gian =E0qgn,
if can.guide.2s your heart.ACC your mind.ACC your flesh.ACC

        If you can force your heart, your mind, your flesh,

anth m=EDltaliun   qamp balu   nef     sis=E9q,
this support.OBJ when before faraway PRF.go.3pPST

        this [=3D so as] to support (you) when=20
        they have before [=3Djust] gone away

farb=FAn matpearer   qamp =FCs     giad ar    freth
thus   can.stay.2s when inside you  be.3s nothing

        (and) this way you can stay when there's nothing
        inside you

kram   dhobar na b=FCrth bur    b=FCd   "Pe=E1r    a!"
except force  to they  say.3s it.REL stay.3s EXCL

        except the power that says to them "Stay!"

Be matsniter   piosn      kith    rin  dandas pears=E8n,
if can.talk.2s people.ACC and_yet with height staying

        If you can talk to the people and yet
        staying high/noble

su rin  danturth trestel fargents=E8n     piosrunan,
or with kings    walking NEG.letting_go people's_way.ACC

        or walking with kings not leaving the way of
        the people

Be farmatregelek  untuth, muinsil fret k=E4shadh,
if NEG.can.hurt.3p enemies equally not  friends.GRP

        If your enemies can't hurt (you) and
        neither can (your) friends

Be nanaier     on  renthn, hotil    nanaier     freth renn    tadh;
if consider.2s all men     too_much consider.2s no    man.ACC however

        If you take all men into account, but
        take no man into account too much

Be matimaldnien fraradruldel  notans
if can.fill.OBJ NEG.forgiving time.ACC

        If to able to fill the unforgiving time

on  gent=FCn notas farf=FCl=FCl     matteger
all during time  NEG.stopping can.run.2s

        you can run without stopping all the time

giadai         dhrith mi  dhrith=FCr  tanq=E9th,
be_yours.3sACT earth  and earth.LOC everything

        The earth is yours, and everything on earth,

a  san teus, taus q=E8r      ren!
oh my  son   also be.2sACT man

        and moreover, oh my son, you're a man!


The "can not" and "not can" clauses were a real
mess. I decided to modify the modal preffixes a bit
-- I had been hesitating with the negatives, fra(r)-
and far-; I'm going to use far- in all cases from now
on, frar- before vowels (Old Language FARA(R)-).

Any comments?


--Pablo Flores