Re: Short Poem

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From: "John L. Leland" <CountSirJehan@...>
To: <CONLANG@...>
Sent: Wednesday, August 06, 2003 3:02 PM
Subject: Short Poem


> Short Poem (from iblissett)
>
> Rihana-ye:
>
> In summer
> Piwa-me
> Summer-in
>
...

           I like, I think your version is the more poetic, it's very
smooth. It's difficult to make poems in my language sound balanced, and I
suppose the language was designed to be somewhat coarse, so I tend to
replace the repetitive/cohesive function of tone and rhyme with other verbal
devices, like repeating certain words or forming descriptive loops.