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Re: Short Poem

From:lblissett <blissett@...>
Date:Wednesday, August 6, 2003, 23:41
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From: "John L. Leland" <CountSirJehan@...>
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Sent: Wednesday, August 06, 2003 3:02 PM
Subject: Short Poem

> Short Poem (from iblissett) > > Rihana-ye: > > In summer > Piwa-me > Summer-in >
... I like, I think your version is the more poetic, it's very smooth. It's difficult to make poems in my language sound balanced, and I suppose the language was designed to be somewhat coarse, so I tend to replace the repetitive/cohesive function of tone and rhyme with other verbal devices, like repeating certain words or forming descriptive loops.