Re: tiny poem
| From: | Nokta Kanto <red5_2@...> |
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| Date: | Thursday, August 7, 2003, 3:10 |
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On Tue, 5 Aug 2003 15:49:20 -0400, lblissett <blissett@...> wrote:
>suikchelek
>jelpach isippu
>iavush.
>pravadadut isasselkehij,
>hakake sh su.
>sagehmm ochee,
>gah owk isugru.
>pravadagmm wurri hah,
>suikchelek.
I like the long-short rhythm, and, knowing nothing of your language, each
line seems to have an intonation that ascends in the first half and falls in
the last half. The circularness of starting and ending with the same word
gives poems a feeling of timelessness IMO. (There's another poem like that
http://www.cs.rice.edu/~ssiyer/minstrels/poems/1301.html)