Re: poetry

In a message dated 2000:09:19 4:35:31 PM, yl112@CORNELL.EDU writes:

>nin hebaze sjabemana hanachis
>nabesana naíyi ris
>bara baraqis
>
>Semi-direct translation:
>our weapons night hid
>enemy we watched
>dawn red
>
>Less direct and better translation:
>Night hid our spears
>We watched for the enemy
>The day dawned red.
>
>===
>
><rueful look>  I'm trying for a haiku or sijo-like feel, though I doubt
>I succeeded; haiku isn't something I ever anticipate doing right.
    I think ya did GREAT. These martial poems read like those Chinese poems
the ancient warrior-scholars used write while between guard-duty along the
Middle Kingdom's outposts, stuff like:

    Torch(es) bright(en) (the) night
    (I) sit guard(ing)
    (the) Kingdom (will) stand

    czHANg