Re: winter quote

JOEL MATTHEW PEARSON wrote:

> On Tue, 9 Mar 1999, Sally Caves wrote:
>
> > Tenuo al aittear; kraiko al ofykya; edrime al imuif.
> > "My name is winter.  Cessation is my business.  My gift, sleep."
>
> This has a nice rhythm to it when translated into Tokana:
>
>         Mai taksa ia tuhsa,
>         imai iala uatapi
>         te uthimma muelhapi
>
> Mai    taksa     ia   tuhsa,  imai   iala           uatapi,
> me-Abs be-called Quot winter  me-Dat be-responsible stopping
>
> te      uthimma muelhapi.
> the-Abs gift-my sleeping
Indeed it does, Matthew!  But then again, it has a marvelous and
completely serendipitous rhythm in Teonaht as well!

Alliteration in the first phrase:  Tenuo al aittear
                    TEN-yo al ai-TAY-ar
Broken alliteration in the second phrase:  Kraiko al ofykya
                    *KRAI-*koh al o-FIH-*kee-uh
Vowel alliteration and internal alliteration on m in the third phrase:
                                        Edrime al imuif
                    *EH-drih-may al *Im-yif

So I'm well pleased with this.  It comes from a much longer poem of
mine written in English.

Yours even rhymes, and it has a kind of consonance with "t" "s" "t" "s"
in the
first phrase.

Sally Caves
http://www.frontiernet.net/~scaves