Re : Conlang-to-conlang translation project

Only the second verse and I'm already ghuuuhmmpf. So I don't take up the
polite foms otherwise I'd have to stay at my desk for hours. I don't have
figures over 20 in Tunu ("20" is "one person") so I wrote "a couple (wife and
husband)" for "40" but I really don't know how to manage 50.
And I don't know how to note Tunu "auxiliary verbs" and their "reversive"
form, so I tried the following :
rvs. : "reverse"
adj. : "adjective"

For instance :
"sky is blue" is noted "sky be blue"
"blue is sky" is noted "blue rvs.be sky"
"sky blue" is noted "sky adj.be blue"
"blue sky" is noted "blue adj.rvs.be sky"

First Boudewijn's verse and notation, then mine :

II

(Boudewijn)
Xipu! Manxu.ri penera.r
EXCL  plum.p   fall.PRS

(Mathias)
A ! Pata ona menumenu
EXCL fall rvs.move plum.p

Sero  t'e.r.neno   berya.deryo relshna.r
1sHGH have.PRS.DUR 10.4        summer.p

Mete ute kana emu natunatu iti pupupu
age adj.rvs.have me consist summer.p adj.be couple

Tau ajim      t'eheran.ze.men t'imti e.sero    u!
NEG young.man ask_for.EXP.AFF   heart  POS.1sHGH EXCL

Keta osi saru isi memete ya etu poti ome rimo ute kana wa kekiri !
Lack rvs.be man adj.be young who express demand rvs.regard heart adj.rvs.have
me end_of_clause sadness !

Yudirci        e.sero    t'e.t'e  berya.kari azhemu
younger_sister POS.1sHGH have.DUP 10.3       year

Mete ute paro iti sesaru omu nemanema iti --- yesi memete ure kana
age rvs.have brethren adj.be woman rvs.consist year.p who.be --- young
adj.rvs.compare me.

Ye  sera  k'ari     chuam.lei  laya     ajum
and 3sHGH yesterday marry.PRT1 handsome man

Eni tetoma a kare ete yu pupu ya epi kerekere
locate yesterday topic she have processive spouse who liken beautiful

P'a ajir    avaneran.ma.men sero
ADH someone court.FUT1.AFF  1sHGH

Poti oma saru iti neko eke wa kare etu suso oma kana
demand rvs.address man adj.be any in_order_to that he express court address
me

At'a   sero  ghadza lodha perve
before 1sHGH die    like  snowdrop

Weni pore ome wa kana esi yu sesana epi titu imu rese
which.locate front rvs.regard that me be processive dead liken drop
adj.consist snow

aaargh.

Thiamas