Re: A Charyan Brothel Song in Teonaht

Boudewijn Rempt <bsarempt@...> wrote:

[snip]
> Of course - the Teonaht poem is the exercise posed.=20
No problem; now I think I got the Denden version --
the Drasel=E9q translation of the Denden version --
thanks to your explanations and after careful reading.

Here it is:


V=E4in i n=E0n

D=F3rth=E4tsil v=E4inek san vaidhadh
Suek gian fasan h=FCrramek
Gian qors biss=FCr f=EDlinek
Gian veb=FCr gian k=F6'ril=FCr n=E9mevek
Gian gaft=FCr liomek, i l=E4rron=20
t=E0b=FCnval mevek gian st=F2mandh
L=F6ss=F6l v=E4in san uke
Sonheql=FCr dh=EDdmer=FCr soldrel teg
Gentel p=E1dhantherg kinklivek vaidhadh
aqrim dreft=E8n k=E1salm=E4n=FCr brampal tups=E8n
Tiull i l=F6ss h=FCrr=E1m urth=E1l, tenf=E1dh a
rin tiull, qgumpot gian vlel, tenf=E1dh a!


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Interlinear translation
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V=E4in   i   n=E0n
stroll PRT song

        Genitive/associative _i_ particle here.


D=F3rth=E4tsil v=E4inek    san vaidhadh
drunkenly  stroll.3p my  fingers.GRP

Suek gian fasan    h=FCrramek
over your forehead tremble.3p

Gian qors biss=FCr    f=EDlinek
your long braid.LOC fly.3p

        I didn't have a proper translation for "glide".
        I think this conveys the general sense. Note I didn't
        say "over your braid" but "on your braid".


Gian veb=FCr    gian k=F6'ril=FCr   n=E9mevek
your neck.LOC your dimple.LOC dance.3p

        Am I wrong here?

=20
Gian gaft=FCr       liomek, i   l=E4rron
your shoulder.LOC rest.3p PRT pleasure

        Two words for "shoulder": _gafut_ for the top and
        the front part up the... long thin bone there (?);
        _varsmalk_ "back-structure" for the top and the back
        of the shoulders (I used that on Issytra's text).
=09

t=E0b=FCnval    mevek   gian st=F2mandh
AUG.feeling take.3p your breasts.GRP

L=F6ss=F6l  v=E4in      san uke
fluidly stroll.3s my  penis

        _Uke_ is not very proper in the presence of innocent
        ladies, but perfectly OK (neutral) among men, and most
        Dr=E1selhadh married women wouldn't blush either.


Sonheql=FCr dh=EDdmer=FCr soldrel teg
belly.LOC navel.LOC quickly run.3s

Gentel p=E1dhantherg kinklivek  vaidhadh
then   waves.COMP  stammer.3p fingers.GRP

aqrim    dreft=E8n k=E1salm=E4n=FCr     brampal tups=E8n
suddenly wishing wheatfield.LOC falling fitting

        "Wish" and "sexually desire" are the same; context serves
        to distinguish both. Plenty of context available here,
        so that's no problem. :)
        _brampal_ "falling" =3D "diving"
        _tups=E8n_ "fitting" =3D "occupying a space well fitted"
        (no equivalent for "nestling"!)


Tiull i   l=F6ss h=FCrr=E1m     urth=E1l, tenf=E1dh  a
lust  PRT flow tremble.3s hill    RFX.open oh

        Again, genitive _i_: "a flow of lust" or
        "a lusty stream". There's no explicit link to
        the following verb, but a concomitant sense is
        understood.


rin  tiull, qgumpot    gian vlel,  tenf=E1dh  a!
with lust   wide.MV.3s your vagina RFX.open oh

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--Pablo Flores