Re: O Zeyly Nibro Nizzemfon

Ahhhh!  You are the only one to attempt the
despised O Zeyly Nibro Nizzemfon!

I loved, by the way, your translation of "Verimak."
Someone else did one, too, within the past twenty-
four hours, and please forgive me if I can't remember
who, but I'll go back and check.  I'm so deeply
grateful when somebody takes an interest in my
little project.  Yes, Pablo, I remember the "silk
purse" from your translation of Boudewijn's poem,
and I like your use of metaphors.  "Verimak" was
very accurate... this one shows the rough edges of
the original a  little more.  Do you mind if I take
out the "smooth" English version and examine it?


FFlores wrote:

> =DCodel kroqgn i velvith fna
> varsar gian uldid;
> lif pon smalkigth
> i th=E8l g=FC'ftotot;
> Donth lunmith
> qeq b=FCtth pon gef.
> Aus lif porr na vequit freth
> kram drast=E8n
> rroses dhenerrn s=E4n
> na r=E1tsaisentan
> ausnaffavdel rath.
> On fanth nuldas smokek
> pon briguann
> "Len lan..."
> Tolen a! T=F3lenenev famp!
> "Len lan lal!"
>
Completely nine yards downYour father lies.
From his bones   (how I love the word "smalk" for "skeleton"!)
Coral is forming.   (Teonaht has a similar middle voice, which I should
have used)
Those pearls, which were his eyes  (T. is zero-copula so that should be
                                                        "Those are
pearls which were his eyes."
[And here I'm stumbling...]
Out from him to waste nothing
Except enduring (lit. "crossing")
A change of the sea (literally, in T. a "sea-ish change.")
to be exalted (to?)
Something extraordinary.

Each hour strike
[the mermaids--a part you've left out here.]
his bell

Len lan...
Listen I hear them:  Len lan lal

Boy, I've probably made mincemeat of this!
Forgive me!

Do you want to see the original?  I'll post it with
"spoiler headers."

Thanks for doing this!


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