Re: Demuan to Teonaht

Sally Caves wrote:

> TEONAHT:
>
> Vaiua mohs'len farrandro lo pero perromas.
> Etsa vaiua cel brihhtil-in lo nihhtrindel tanttamas.
> Etsa vaiua rinil ilvaz farrandro htinddeles.
> Etsa htindro ev nirrando pot' aid ouaned lises.
>
> ("A large bird henceforth will make its ancient song.
> Said bird in a mist its feathers will it dance.
> Said bird of the nightsky henceforth will it sing.
> Said song by all kings will get its hearing.")
I'm not at all happy with this last line.  The meter
is choked, so I've reworded it.

Etsa htindro aid ouaned ev taso rando lises.
Said song    its hearing by each king gets.

Yie!  In poetry, Teonaht can blessedly violate its
syntactical rules.  Here, the SOV word order doesn't
have to have the requisite redundant pronoun in front
of the verb, and I've returned to the old custom of
putting verb endings after the verb!  Yes!

> Sally  --nwetis lehtdel ("very fiery/inspired")
still inspired.

If you get around to putting it up, Irina, put it up
with this corrected line.  Thanks.