Re: Intergermansk - Three Rings
| From: | Mark J. Reed <markjreed@...> |
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| Date: | Friday, January 28, 2005, 15:02 |
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On Fri, Jan 28, 2005 at 11:34:06AM +1100, Tristan McLeay wrote:
> I never noticed the rhyme in the original, I'm sure it's no great loss.
> (I've never thought of it as particularly great verse.)
Maybe that's because you didn't notice the rhyme. :) Okay, it's not
*great* verse, but I quite like it. And I wouldn't if it didn't rhyme;
IMO, verse ain't verse if it don't rhyme - free verse is neither. :)
I like the rhythm as well:
/ / ^ ^ / ^ ^ / ^ ^ /
Three rings for the Elven-kings under the sky dactylic pentameter A
/ (^) ^ ^ / ^ ^ / ^ ^ /
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone dactylic tetrameter B
/ ^ / ^ / / ^ /
Nine for mortal Men, doomed to die trochaic pentameter A
/ ^ ^ / ^ ^ / ^ /
One for the Dark Lord on his Dark Throne dactylic tetrameter B
/ ^ / ^ / ^ / ^ / ^ /
In the land of Mordor where the shadows lie trochaic hexameter A
/ / ^ / ^ /
One Ring to rule them all trochaic tetrameter C
/ / ^ / ^
One Ring to find them trochaic trimeter D
/ / ^ / ^ /
One Ring to bring them all trochaic tetrameter C
^ / ^ / ^ / ^
And in the darkness bind them trochaic trimeter D
/ ^ / ^ / ^ / ^ / ^ /
In the land of Mordor where the shadows lie. trochaice hexameter A
-Marcos
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