Re: A more challenging poetry translation challenge

On Sun, 27 Nov 2005 10:59, Gary Shannon wrote:
> The 17th century English poet Robert Herrick, whose
> most famous line is probably "Gather ye rosebuds while
> ye may," somewhere around 1629 wrote this short, but
> memorable two-line poem. I give it in the original
> English since I'm not yet completely satisfied with my
> translation to Elomi.
>
> Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to
> translate it into your favorite conlang.
>
> Another Upon Her Weeping by Robert Herrick.
>
Li' Anyerra-Tarah

> She by the river sat, and sitting there,
nan a   li'     foru'a,    nan a li' apai
sat-by  she a river,    sat  she there
> She wept, and made it deeper by a tear.
li' si'araf,   li'      ai'if    li' no'uru  pata'i u   siai
she wept,  she made  it   more  deep of a tear
>
> --gary
Wesley Parish
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