My masterpiece, part 1 (long)

Fellow Conlangers:

I'm writing to celebrate the completion of the biggest conlanging project
I have ever undertaken.  What follows is the Yivríndil creation myth,
written entirely *in Yivríndil*, approximately 2,000 words of it.  What's
even more exciting is that the English version which I'm posting in a
separate e-mail is actually a translation of the Yivríndil, not the
reverse.  Although I don't have the proficiency to actually compose in
Yivríndil, I was able to approximate that by first writing an English
version, then making a very free translation into Yivríndil and editing
the text heavily along the way.  Then I used the Yivríndil text as the
new original and translated it into English for general consumption.

I'd like to know if anyone else has a conlang text of comparable length
or ambition, and how they made it.  Of course the text below won't be
really intelligible to anyone, but I welcome general comments on the
aesthetics or nature of the peice.  Thanks

Jesse S. Bangs     Pelíran
jaspax@ juno.com
"Skin and tragedy always attract a crowd."
    --Pedro the Lion


KÉHANASÍ ARATAOSA

 Boraon Ëlori eala da Kavedon.  Ta essuvval niKaved, ta peyyal népereni
keth eya Kendelori, Kalelori, ta Pendelori.  Anao Vassalendi aniKendelori
kepoyal Ëlori ta vassavval vassura wí el.  Morillan aniKendelori
damaisyal nivassa aVassalendi ta gadoyal, ta gadoila kayyala nessoron ta
therason.  Toraon Pantheloné aniKendelori nodeyyal nivassa, ta sithyal
sith, té sithyala rogon ínat lai eth ta narsalmo elé tanyolas.  Nyulo
eola nessormura wí Ëlori da Kaved.

 Té Vanelor aniKalelori fasayal na nessoron wí Ëlori ta damaisyal
niKaved, ta voterayala pí Kavedon ta fayal Aratasa.  Daratyala tomyéon
Aratasa ta agidyal no seldoitona, ta agídela eal vanessa nessil putenen
kéAratasa.  Maisyal nivanessa ta selonyul da víssédetonar.  Anao fayol
endaila Aratelor, ta rupeyyal Vanelor ef niul ol nayyaas keth da Aratasa
talayat, lai seldoita selonyoa ga nivanekaisonar, ta nivanessa lanyaa
Kaved, lai bomyaa ta víssyaa fasai silon, ta pakel koremakéhya ul?

 La Vanelor therasahyola pereni aAratelor ta vuressyal el no fedono
karínyal aiyíka.  Ta niaind afedo aAratelor afyal no vanessona ta enyul
eth arat, ta na fedono Aratelor kéhanayyal alumi bomil ta kalasi hatillu.
 Nyulo Aratelor na nasarun kargayyaa, ta hatar anikalasi darohyaa el.

 Néon no Aratasona fayol Kíyoné, ta kíneyyala no seldono aAratasa ta
kínéyeloné niendav aAratelor ta aVanelor géseyyol.  Kínéyelé enyul eth
kínar aAratasa, ta niarati uvanavvola uvani ta miridi miridavvala mí
vanessona.

 La Ëlori peyyal niKalelori ef ola to'onya endaisír nayyaas katha lai
talayaa.  Lai da Aratasona eo El, ta El lanyat Kaved.  Lainyu ola tofayya
no Aratasona ta to'otavíkya életa kalaita ínkalahyélo'os da Kavedon.

 Anao Gilendi ta kéhaimela Naravar fayal no Aratasona, ta onyala em
valíta lanyala Kaved, lainyu dokalahyal po'íta varun.  Lai Gilendi enyul
eth elu agilid ta a'eva, ta varonnai varavvaa mí seldono aAratasa.
Naravar hé'éton puturatyul varun, té varílé ínlassyaa ta ethrayaa, ta
ruvaidavval niarat varíloné naril.  Ta Gilendi senavvala melun ta Naravar
eldun ta loirelosí eora kévaput da Aratasa.  Lunelor fayal besílosí, ta
essuila índaonyala, lai tukéyal tupen nessil ikil ta sakyal beyus
aGilendi ta aNaravar.  Da tupeyon tukéyal luneni harillai fasai siln, ta
lainyu kéhanasíla ínessupunyoa na né'étona, ta íyanyol yindar.

 No Verdanentéon Ëlori la fayal ta no essuiloné seyyal almo bessil.  Lai
fayyal no Aratasona ta keltavval vír ta vérdor ta ké'edami aví, ta
Kalelori otaméthavvol, lai da radosoní a'eldailér eola hésa anitarn
aniKalelori.  Narsailosé Baratasad fayal, ta nayyal beri senavven mí
araton ta síssovven niotavíyosí aVerdanenté.  Ta Baratasad anathyala
Aratelor, lai keltaimelar akindavvol ela senedon aAratelor ta no araton
senovvaa mí kathun taifakyol.  Toraon aniKalelori fayol Saravoné, ta
anyala Vanelor ta delessyal.  Ta nayyal uyor kayyo vanessailar kathun ta
keth taifavvat no araton, ta toraon nayyal ondor kína kayyéos.  Nyulo
Aratasa kalahyolas keltamoni ta botono, ta onosar aKalelori talayala.
Pendelori la maisyal Aratasa, ta ké'ela pestanyal Kalelor ela lanyaa keth
almono ta telun, ta ela nayyal kuanalami ta akanavval senedi ela tayyoas
eth keth.

YINDAR


 La eola hossa da Kaved kataironar Aratasa ku radoyaa no kalona.  Ta
Kalelorios míthyol em Ëlori essuyaa, ta ku taon botoya peyyar kévaperen.
Té Ëlori éyela dafayyal Aratasa, ta da hossono karahes sinahyal bessan
keth eya yindar.  Niyindar sinyala lan baruni aBaratasad, ta tavvala til
aAratasa.  Té ku tísinahyol, Ëlori élosa kíneyyal ta ela nasilmyal lanna
silmona, ta peravval paruni ta essuvval essonur ta lanyala Ëlori ta
Kalelori.  Ta Kalelori otaméthyol, ta Ëlorios ulaivval, lai kavela
tavvara té almo té nessor keltyéos niedam.  Ta Ëlori silmuranyal
niyindar, ta Kalelorios peratyal ef:

 Ola onyaa al nayyaas katha, keth lanyat keltaimesír lai tayyaa essu lan
ola té tayyaa til lan Aratasa.  Ta lan ola reyi eldaivar, nyulo niyindar
eldaivar, ta élosa al anyaa.  Lainyu ola tonayya eled tíedamil élosa,
keth seya eled harillu ín da Aratasa niyindar fa eledyéos ta daratyéos.
Ta niKalelori daroyal niul nayyélo'os.

 Lainyu ké'ela nayyal relid yindosar delosa amainelí.  Aratelor
hatahyalas wír na kalasi hatillu ín péula da Aratasa, ta selduitír
kendavvíratyala salona.  Vanelor masanyal vanos víssil da loran avvír, ta
vanar anivanos téusyala ta kalahyal dolvo víssil.  Na dolvono nofayyol
vanor afaika darainyaa, ta nivanor vanoravvala no maisona anikalasi ta
fasai no niaratasona.  Kíyoné kínelavval kínathi evenil mí alnason, ta
nastoyala lan nastono.  Baratasad la nayyal ber bessil ínnessoren
kébarusi el boraon nayyaas keth lai savíta gilídenyala, ta walkoita
nessoyala ta tholdohyala.  Nyulo Saravoné nayyal rok méthídekar
morainyala ta kíroika nessoratyala.  Toraon Verdanenté nayyal vierduré
keth senyala no vanoson aVanelor, ta banoitar bomyala ta vierdévval
kunedami akalthor.

 Gilendi ta Naravar senyala mí niarason relidyéos bada nessillu ín pí
varíloní, ta Lunelor wíratyal luneni mí niaras keth ínvaratyal ta
ínsarayal peluneni ta keth géfalavvar.  Lunelor na Kalelori la íyanyal
niyindosar, ta onyal em Gilendi ta Naravar mí eled ayindar senavvéon
nivarasílí putavvala hara anilunénelar.  Lainyu Ëlorios ilendyal ef
to'onya, simela senavvatam da ba'edun, ta lainyu relídeva niyindosar
mo'onavvat.  Lainyu Ëlori akanyal Gilendi ta Naravar ef fasa toresenavva
ta toresenavvat sarun da ba'edun, lai kuvasaruni nessor aniluneni
tomovvo.

 La Naravar ilohyol, lai Gilendios anyala ta enoyala em karahyor na élon.
 Lainyu éposé nayyal mítor ikil ta mítoratyal tarsailé ta peyyal ef al
tomítoratyu nimítarun ku fasaya na anaimevona, ta rumítoratyun al ku
kepoyan no élon.  Lainyu Gilendi ta Naravar fasonnai ín senyéon var
aNaravar putenavvoa, ta kepo'on ku senya var aNaravar ínvaravvaa.  Ta
Ëlori naseyyal ef basarun ataira simela ta mobahyol, ta pa Naravar
mítoravva tarsailír ta eo val mí niaratasona Naravar ku nofayya anaimelé.

 Niula ku nayyoas, Ëlori la agidyal no tarsonar ayindar ta ela nasilmyal,
ta el dityal ela no arason Kalelori nayyaas keth élosa.  Ta niyindar
daratyal nétos, ta sémyal niaras Hara.  Niber nessil aBaratasad sémyal ef
Tyegro, ta nirok aSaravoné ef Thollos, ta nivierdé aVerdanenté ef Levos,
ta lunenuri aLunelor sémyal ef Alnar.  Ta eledavval Hara ta daratyala.

 Ëlori ku nayya yindar peyyal ef to'onya, niyindar eyi ba'edam, ta eon
loirelosí baalmo ínat ta bathor ínat.  Lainyu ala tokarínya niedamasí
aniyindar, lai ru basí keth divvoa na kolona koíntalayata basí keth
divvoa na baéton?  Lainyu Ëlori karínyal yindar no yísona ta no yísoné,
ta ké'ela eth bada a'edamasí ayindar tanyol.  Anao akanyal ef Yísa
toarnavvat elat Yísoné, ta Yísé ét elat Yísona, lai ela karil sindasinyaa
ínat.  Niétos tosedelessyan, ta nibasí íntalayana ín basí ela boraon
tayyala keth.


AFA AVASSALENDI TA AYINDAR


 Vassalendi ínnessoratyala niKendelori ta ínlanyala Ëlori da almoilonar
ta nessoirelona.  Ta onyal em Ëlori anyaa Aratasa, ta em yindar vassavva
no élon, ta otamavval lai boraon vassa eala senédela abon.  Lainyu ega
Elos no istailona maisyal, ta manyala em ruinya El aAratasa ta em dakéhya
nessor avassa éposa da Kavedon.  Ta vassyal vassura pí niéton lan
istaita, ta kunaPendelori otaméthyol vassaila ta deyyal, té péela thoyyal
ta hinsuyal.  Ta na mesun aVassalendi nofayyol Navvur, Lethakalan, keth
manya em nokya El aAratasa.  Lai Lethakalan eyi elda a'ega aVassalendi,
ta hinyaa em rothya kal keth eyi ta toraon ta vorothyu.

 Morillan la onyal Vassalendi nayya katha, ta akavyal ruélos.  Ta eol
akav da Kaved tairona, ta Morillan akavyal ruVassalendios té mogésenyar
té mokepuhyar per aniYavvur.  Té Ëlori nofayal na Aratsona, ta ku faya
tarsaila kalahyol therason.  Anao peratyal, ta Vassalendi gaspayala
tarsailosa.  Niul eal essupuna aËlori ef

 Vassalendi ol otamanyaas nali akéha aËlori, ta nyulo egyaas katha
talayaa élos.  Ol ta roandayyal ta rouinyal kéEl, lai da Kavedon até
rotomya, lai al dayaa Kaved lan al dayaa El, ta da évon sim eyi ba.  Té
ol egyéon El toakindyo, ta to'omyant Kaved, ol até vomavvaa.  Nyulo
Vassalendi elatakrayol no Aratasona.

 Té Lethakalan kavélon monaltonyora, ta Ëlori rouinyar.  Tolosa
vosilmakyal, ta Aratelor akindyal wí nossonor aAratasa.  Lainyu Ëlori
akanyal ef ul senavvaa no dalmona ahael ta akaltho a'egaila Vassalendios,
lai peyyol ef toraon asarn Lethakalan nasilmyan ta rokyan niaratasa ta
rokyan Vassalendi akindes no niaratasona, ta anao vorokyun ta nofasayan
no kulvurona seldu'il.

 Ela Vassalendion afyolas naPendelori keth maisyaas no vassailona ta
essunupyatas, ta na niélona eola néela nessillu na Pendelori.  Sémailír
abil pa almetyoas, ta pa sémyoa ef Tholden, Gathos, ta Durkendé, ta ela
Durkendéon fayol lastakainelé Vandar.  Niela lanyaa Kalelori nessono, ta
Vassalendi na nessoilona relidyalas ela ínnessohyélo'os, ta ela
tholduhyal.

 Nakandonar Yindar etto karínyoras, ta durnavvara ta lethatavvara ta
naffavvara.  Ta aras Hara wíyala ela, ta daravvala da haraitona ta
vassavvala vassar a'ulai Ëlorios ta Kalelorios keth nayyaas niaratasa.
Té vassailír egahyala Vassalendi lai el la vassavvara ta voegyala
kelaimeka.  Ku afya no Aratasona nivassar aniyindar la nofayala ka'ílar
taon, ta egahyul eth ela.  Ta puturatyul siyona agilid ta aval, ta
lukavyal Yindar vassailír naltonyélo'os.  Niul eal baakav aVassalendi
runiyindosar, ta niéton niyindar voluskyol lai etto yírainyala ta
lassoyala.  Té Lunelor aKalelori masyal ta vuressyal Vassalendi, lai
anyala yindar, ta sakyal uyond atirenasí wí ela.  Lainyu Vassalendi
akavyalam ruyindosar nasarun, ta fayyal no víssedoni aAratasa ta silmyal.

 Niyindar la ku onyal Vassalendi tholduyal ta nessoilosa ta egailosa, ta
ín onyéos lethat da onailar Kavedos.  Ta nyulo aiso almuyal Kaved keth
lasaron selonyola na élona.  Ta nasarun Lethakalan akindyola wí
Aratasona.  Yindar thoyyal ta nétos, lai Lethakalan eala akra atoran aEl
da Aratasa, ta Yindar anyal El ta vomanyala em dolmuya éposa.

 Nyulo Vassalendi onyal romafanya Yindar kathona ta romelígya Ëlori épos.
 Lainyu paleton favval loros ayindar ta peravval ela, ta thissavval ef ta
Ëlori eyi nalan aKaved, ta ef akindyaas Lethakalan wí Aratasa, ta ef ola
romonyaa niul lan ronamyaa.  Peyyal taon ef ola torehinsuya na Ëlorion ta
toregénaperatya Kaved lai enyun eth kendar aEl ta kuva taon sothoyyant
Kaved.  Ta niyindar arnoyal el.

 Lainyu Ëlori ku taon fayya Yindar ela tarsyala el, ta onyala em Kaved
ela El dayaa el, ta hinsuyal na élon.  Ëlori la paressyal élosa ef ola
kulai hinsuyaa na évon?

 Niyindar koyyal ef lai ol eyi Kaved, ta ala keth eyi El voanyua.

 Ta Ëlori taon peyyal ef ola kulai hinsuyaa na évon?

 Ta niyindar koyyal ef lai ol divvaa Kaved évosa, ta ala hinsuyaa na
Kavedon enyéluos eth kendar aEl.

 Ta Ëlori taikoyyal ef ola talimono peyya ef al divvaa Kaved éosa, té
niul ét katha sothoyyoa.  Ta ola koarnoyaa em menyun eth kendar aEl lan
ropífayyantas Kaved?

 Ta niyindar koyyal ef até ala voegyaa Kaved, ta manyaa em falmya ul na
Aratasona, ta taon ol falmyo lan ol rodivvaa Kaved évosa.

 Anao Ëlori ilendavval, lai anyaa niyindar, té peyyal ef teo.  Ta fasyal
na niaratasa.

 Vassalendi la onyal em Ëlori elayaam Yindar, ta taon vofayyal akavos ela
néakasperailonar Tholden, Gathos, ta Durkendé.  Ta volukavyal Yindar ta
kéhanasír aKalelori, ta voluskyala ula.  La niKalelori deyyal niakav
ruélos, ta eola akav nessil da aras Hara.  Ta kéYindar namifyol na Harona
lai mosenyara da nokavona aVassalendi, ta Hara haril ruinyol niakavon.
NiKalelori mogésenyar Vassalendi té monamifyar na Harona, té el até la
moruinyara ela.  Lainyu enyal Hara eth nessod athol ta a'ega tholillai ta
nesso'illai ín kéedindi da Aratasa ta eledavval fa akavyaa na kathona.
Ta Yindar sémavval ef Durned, ta sémavval Vassalendi ef Agam, ta ruélos
voegyal.

 Ëlori até almetyaras Yindar, ta onyal em mainelí Elos tuvoyan ela, ta em
lan elat toraon ela rotarnyana rogon talayant ín Agam.  Lainyu peyyal ef
Yindar tosenavva sarun rogil ínat da niaratasona, ta anao tonafavva voyon
duronyélutos da tarainelonír.  Lai duron abon pa moseltyoa.  Nyulo elur
aniYindar fasavvaa eruilír narosa asar rogil, ta Vandar sardovvaa ela
Durkendéos kendéndeka dayaa par aLethakalan.

 Nyulo durn maisyal niaratasa, ta Yindar egyaa ul até eyi relid na Ëlori.
 Ta kéyindar namen em kédoya El épos keltavval putra ta elduron ta gasla,
ta waron poranyul fasona mí Aratasa ta enyul eth kunayinur.  Eotam akav
da Aratasa, té Agamon ruKalelorios, té Agamon ruYindosar, té Yindonar
ruéposa lai namavvaa otavísí luskona rupé'élos.  Ta Ëlori fasainyaa, té
almetyatas Aratasa, ta nessuni peravvaa ef taon maisyan niaratasa boranos
atoran.

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